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Dmitrii Reference by May5Rogers99 Dmitrii Reference by May5Rogers99
This is one of my references for Chernobyl Curs!
The other character Alexandria is [link]

Name: Dmitrii

Breed Base: Caucasian Ovcharka, Asian Shepherd dog

Age: 3

Height: 30" at the shoulder

Weight:165 lbs

Gender: Male

Abilities: Telepathic- He can read the minds of dogs around him. Since Dmitrii hasn't been around large groups of dogs
before the tournament he has never felt a splitting headache before. He has about a fifty foot range of reading minds. The problem with being around so many dogs is he has to be able to concentrate. In other words he's hearing every thought at once making it hard to focus on just one dog and this makes it even harder to be able to see an attack coming.

Strengths: Strong jaw, powerful legs, and thick neck fur

Weaknesses: Slow because of his size, he has low stamina, he can get overheated from his thick coat, and has a big scar on the left side on his rib cage (still fairly tender).
Personality: He doesn’t care about anyone. He’s self absorbed but this is changed very quickly when he meets Alex for the first time.
Likes:-Fighting
-Alex
-Annoying Alex by reading her mind even when she expressly tells him to stay out!

Dislikes:-His father
-Dog food

Other: He's been alone for most of his life. Always moving from place to place. The rest is better off left untold until later.
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DannyHorseRules Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2011  Hobbyist
Just wondering; does Dmitrii have ears or are they cropped to almost no ear left? .3. Its hard to tell xD
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May5Rogers99 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2011  Student General Artist
There cropped but not totally gone. And don't worry I could hardly tell in the pictures I referenced! ;D
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Shinkoryu14 Featured By Owner May 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Alright, the abilities for both characters need to be elaborated on heavily. "Telepathic" and "telekinetic" are very vague. What exactly can Demitri and Alexandria do?

Also, Dimitri's getting headaches and not being able to use his powers in a crowd aren't weaknesses, they're limitations on his power. They should be under "ability", and he'll need two additional weaknesses to compensate.

Finally, while history is optional we'd like for each of the characters to at least have a blip explaining why it was left off; either because their backstory is uninteresting or because the audience not knowing it is important for the plot.

If you modify these points you'll be set.
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May5Rogers99 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011  Student General Artist
Okay finished it hope it looks better now! :)
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Shinkoryu14 Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Alright, Dmitrii's ability is too strong. A mile is a really big range, he needs a much smaller range, and some sort of limitation that will give his opponent a sporting chance to fight back. The fact that his power is so strong and has such a huge range also negates his poor hearing weakness. It doesn't matter than he can't hear his enemy coming if he can just sense their mind from a mile off. If he can just hear their thoughts wherever they are and know exactly what they intend to do and where they are at all times, they don't stand a chance because he can counter anything they decide to throw at him. Maybe if the enemy had to be within his line of sight, or if he has to stand still and concentrate in order to read minds?
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May5Rogers99 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Student General Artist
Okay. I finished! I hope the changes work and I'm sorry for having taken so long. :)
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Shinkoryu14 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Fifty feet sounds much more reasonable, that's about half the length of a football field.

However, getting dizzy from being out in the sun too long and overheating because of his long fur seem like the same weakness, not two distinct ones. He still needs one more weakness to be balanced.
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May5Rogers99 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Student General Artist
I hope my opponents can have fun with this weakness if its good! :D
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Shinkoryu14 Featured By Owner Jun 5, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm not sure how dogs would even tickle someone, they don't have fingers. If you're having trouble thinking of weaknesses, we do have a list in our FAQ.

"anemic, slow, physical weakness, a limp, practical weak spots, easily dislocated bones, fragile bone structure, poor balance, poor maneuverability, frequent fainting/headaches/vomiting, heart condition, epileptic, narcoleptic, previous injuries, arthritis, or blood condition"
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